Description
Submission Feedback Overall Feedback You have a good and very important question, but this paper isn’t really a literature review, and it lacks focus, support and organization. My big suggestion is to try changing your focus from looking at “The Media” as the agent (doer), to review literature on why/why not anti-racist groups (which you have to identify) were successful in capturing media attention. When were they able to? When weren’t they? What does the literature offer that explains the successes and failures? Change the focus from the abstract/top down to a focus from bottom-up, concrete efforts to influence the media. This will help solve your problem of not presenting a theory about the role of media in reinforcing/sustaining racism (which this paper should probably have). While this might involve going back and looking at different sources, since you’ve written most of the current draft without heavy use of sources (and you’ll have to change that), you won’t be losing a lot of literature review material. If you shift to lens to focus on the groups as the cause and media as the institution responding, that will solve your big problem with the current draft of attributing all sorts of intentionality to a social institution (whereas in reality it is a macro-level social institution representing/reflecting social values and power relationships). You will need to have a clearer logic/justification for your subsections. Perhaps you wish to focus on hate crimes, beauty pageants, and police killing people as three cases to examine how specific anti-racist groups (do you mean groups or movements) navigated getting publicity. There are also technical issues to address. Review the powerpoint on style Tips for Writing Effective Sociology Papers and the ASA reference format quick guide how to create References Cited and Quick_Tips_for_ASA_Style See attached PDF for full comments and suggestions. See rubric for areas to work on. For explanations of the digital tags on the PDF, look at TurnitinFeedback Studio file (at the end).
